Persuasive Writing

For writing this week, we had to write a Persuasive piece of writing. Our teacher showed us a gallery that we can choose the topic from (we didn't have to pic our topic from the gallery - we can think of our own). I chose to write about Rhinos being extinct/endangered.

What does it mean to persuade someone? Persuade means convince, if we want to persuade someone, we're convincing them to do something.

WALT:

- I can write a shorter persuasive post by making a claim and backing it up with reasons

- I can plan for a longer persuasive post by identifying the topic, audience and genre

- I can research my topic by asking a question, researching for sources, identifying information and paraphrasing the facts.

What I did good on: Finding facts to support my piece of writing.

What I need to work on: Linking paragraphs from one to another.

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Why are rhinos endangered? We need to stop killing animals. Have you ever thought of what would happen when one day, these animals would just disappear? If you haven’t, think about it.

For over 60 years, we humans managed to wipe out 60% of the living creatures in our only planet. One big problem is rhinos. Hunting and poaching rhinos isn’t a new problem since it’s been going on for centuries.

Rhinos are being poached for their horns since it consists of Keratin - which is something we apply to our hair - and other unnecessary uses. These rhinos' horns take 3 years to shift back to its usual form. However, if the skull was cut along with the horn, it will never grow back. These horns are important for these rhinos, they need it for daily use - such as digging for water and breaking branches.

Also one of the main reasons why rhinos are extinct/endangered is habitat loss. We've been destroying other animals’ homes - oh and again, our planet. Without these rhinos, the animals living in the savanna would find it hard to do other things - because these rhinos clear out the paths that other creatures walk on, dig holes for water, and helps plants with their progress on growing up.

Did you know that Sumatran rhinos are the most endangered out of its species, and there’s only 80 left in the world? Exactly, we only have 12 years to save our one and only planet. We should take action before it’s too late! WWF (World Wide Fund) has been helping increase these rhinos’ population, and protect their habitats, and we can help them save these rhinos - every dollar you donate will help WWF prevent rhinos from becoming extinct.

Would you still be poaching rhinos for their horns just for Keratin to make your hair shinier? Less Keratin, more rhinos.

Descriptive Writing and Linking Paragraphs

For the past two weeks of Term 3 for writing, we have been working on using our five senses and linking paragraphs. We had to write what we think the man in the picture can see, hear, feel, taste and smell, and write it in our perspective (I chose to write in third person view). But before we began writing, we went through a slideshow telling us how to write a proper paragraph.

I found it hard: Linking the last sentence from the first paragraph to the next one.

I found it easy: Finding adjectives (describing words)

I found it fun: Brainstorming the ideas for what we see, hear, feel, smell, and taste

WALT… 
-Use paragraphs to link similar ideas together
-Write in structured, well developed paragraphs that flow well from one to the next within the text
-Use linking words and phrases to link paragraphs for effect

He feebly stumbles to the cold wooden floor, on every attempt of getting up, he fails, his legs were too weak and couldn’t carry him, despite how skinny he looks. As every thunder passes by, his scars would appear, additionally revealing his skin covered in blood, what was covering it was his old, stained clothes, it looked like it hasn’t been washed in ages. He wondered what he would have to do to get this over with, but nothing, his mind was full of negative thoughts rather than thinking about how he would go on. As the rain falls, I could see the littlest light smoothly touch his skin, as the rain gently patted the window panes.

As the raindrops drip, he thought to himself, what would his family be doing right now? The kids would be outside, he remembered what he and his youngsters would do on a rainy day while leaves are fluttering across them. He imagined himself with his daughter and her older brother, holding hands in a circle, dancing and singing joyfully in the rain. His wife would be cooking dinner. He asked himself, "How did it all go downhill?"