Persuasive Writing

For writing this week, we had to write a Persuasive piece of writing. Our teacher showed us a gallery that we can choose the topic from (we didn't have to pic our topic from the gallery - we can think of our own). I chose to write about Rhinos being extinct/endangered.

What does it mean to persuade someone? Persuade means convince, if we want to persuade someone, we're convincing them to do something.

WALT:

- I can write a shorter persuasive post by making a claim and backing it up with reasons

- I can plan for a longer persuasive post by identifying the topic, audience and genre

- I can research my topic by asking a question, researching for sources, identifying information and paraphrasing the facts.

What I did good on: Finding facts to support my piece of writing.

What I need to work on: Linking paragraphs from one to another.

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Why are rhinos endangered? We need to stop killing animals. Have you ever thought of what would happen when one day, these animals would just disappear? If you haven’t, think about it.

For over 60 years, we humans managed to wipe out 60% of the living creatures in our only planet. One big problem is rhinos. Hunting and poaching rhinos isn’t a new problem since it’s been going on for centuries.

Rhinos are being poached for their horns since it consists of Keratin - which is something we apply to our hair - and other unnecessary uses. These rhinos' horns take 3 years to shift back to its usual form. However, if the skull was cut along with the horn, it will never grow back. These horns are important for these rhinos, they need it for daily use - such as digging for water and breaking branches.

Also one of the main reasons why rhinos are extinct/endangered is habitat loss. We've been destroying other animals’ homes - oh and again, our planet. Without these rhinos, the animals living in the savanna would find it hard to do other things - because these rhinos clear out the paths that other creatures walk on, dig holes for water, and helps plants with their progress on growing up.

Did you know that Sumatran rhinos are the most endangered out of its species, and there’s only 80 left in the world? Exactly, we only have 12 years to save our one and only planet. We should take action before it’s too late! WWF (World Wide Fund) has been helping increase these rhinos’ population, and protect their habitats, and we can help them save these rhinos - every dollar you donate will help WWF prevent rhinos from becoming extinct.

Would you still be poaching rhinos for their horns just for Keratin to make your hair shinier? Less Keratin, more rhinos.

Descriptive Writing and Linking Paragraphs

For the past two weeks of Term 3 for writing, we have been working on using our five senses and linking paragraphs. We had to write what we think the man in the picture can see, hear, feel, taste and smell, and write it in our perspective (I chose to write in third person view). But before we began writing, we went through a slideshow telling us how to write a proper paragraph.

I found it hard: Linking the last sentence from the first paragraph to the next one.

I found it easy: Finding adjectives (describing words)

I found it fun: Brainstorming the ideas for what we see, hear, feel, smell, and taste

WALT… 
-Use paragraphs to link similar ideas together
-Write in structured, well developed paragraphs that flow well from one to the next within the text
-Use linking words and phrases to link paragraphs for effect

He feebly stumbles to the cold wooden floor, on every attempt of getting up, he fails, his legs were too weak and couldn’t carry him, despite how skinny he looks. As every thunder passes by, his scars would appear, additionally revealing his skin covered in blood, what was covering it was his old, stained clothes, it looked like it hasn’t been washed in ages. He wondered what he would have to do to get this over with, but nothing, his mind was full of negative thoughts rather than thinking about how he would go on. As the rain falls, I could see the littlest light smoothly touch his skin, as the rain gently patted the window panes.

As the raindrops drip, he thought to himself, what would his family be doing right now? The kids would be outside, he remembered what he and his youngsters would do on a rainy day while leaves are fluttering across them. He imagined himself with his daughter and her older brother, holding hands in a circle, dancing and singing joyfully in the rain. His wife would be cooking dinner. He asked himself, "How did it all go downhill?"

Mother's Day Character Description

This week, we had to make a character description for the significant female in our life, I chose to wrote about my mum. I found it hard using the 'show not tell' in our paragraphs. I found it easy sorting the sentences into the right paragraphs, and I found it fun using Tagalog words for some sentences instead of English.

WALT: 

• Write a Character description
• Use ‘show not tell’ in our writing

My mother has dark brown eyes that shines like a star, medium-length hair with light brown highlights, a round face, soft angled eyebrows, long eyelashes, button nose, and thin, pink lips. But most of all, she has a great heart that warms everyone’s soul, and she has a smile that brightens up our day.

“A mother is your first friend, your best friend, and your forever friend.” She’s my friend starting from the beginning, she was always there for me, especially when my dad was about to give me a ‘palo’ (smack in Tagalog) whenever I did something stupid. She always listens to my problems (and jokes) even though it’s ‘walang kwenta’ (even though ‘it doesn’t make sense’ for her) and to be honest, she doesn’t give the best advices; “Just ignore them” or even sometimes, she’d say “You’ll be fine” - but at least she tries to comfort us.

Sometimes the way my mum acts affects how we act. If she’s grumpy (like when she is when she gets back from work), to be honest we turn grumpy too. But as long as she’s happy, we’re delighted. If she tells us to do something in a grumpy voice, we act grumpily, and she would ask us in a bad-tempered tone “Why are you grumpy? I’m supposed to be the grumpy one here because of how you two behave!” Well yes, sometimes it is our fault why she’s grumpy (When we don’t do what we’re told to) so it’s not her to blame.

My mum is very organized, her perfumes are in a shelf, as well as her stuff that she puts on her face (facial creams, facial creams, and more facial creams), because of that, she doesn’t like it when we’re messy. If she sees stuff lying on the floor, expect her to yell at you, and mind you, if you don’t do what she says within a minute she’ll throw your stuff in the laundry (used or not used) or in the bin, and she’d lecture you about leaving your things unattended.

I don’t feel bad at all (Just joking, I do) when she does all the ‘gawaing bahay’ (chores) while my dad, me and my brother are being “helpful” people (not.) “Anak! Can you please help me do this?” says my mum and we reply with “Wait lang Ma!” (Just Wait, mum!) until she gets annoyed with it and she’d warn us that she’s gonna take our gadgets away from us if we don’t get in the ‘kusina’ (kitchen) in a minute.”

Happy Mother’s Day to the woman who carried me physically for 9 months, and for 12 years financially. Without you, I wouldn't have wrote this

- Love, your daughter,
  Angie

Character Description

WALT: 
- Write a character description
- Use 'show not tell' in our writing

This week we read a book about 'Pig the Star'. We had to write a Character Description about either Pig or Trevor. I found it hard using the 'show not tell'. I found it easy sorting sorting the sentences into the right paragraph. I found it fun making the whole writing.

Pig the Pug - Pig the Pug has a body shaped like a ball causing him to barely move, he as well have big round eyes that’s both looking in different ways, squishy cheeks, and layers of wrinkly skin. He also has a tail that’s curled up and short legs that makes him walk slowly, regards of how large he is.

Pig the pug might not show it physically that he’s a show-off, but once you get to know him, or get to see his true colours, you’ll be annoyed of how much of an attention-seeker he is, he wants all the attention that he could get. Trevor the sausage dog agrees with this statement: “Just ignore him, he just wants attention. The more attention you give, the more he will keep bullying you.”

Because of that, Pig hates it when people try to beat him, or when people get more attention than him. Pig tries to put others down when he notices that somebody’s getting more observation than him. Basically, his mouth is his weapon, it’s all he uses to retaliate, once he spits out words, it’ll hurt others’ feelings. Pig’s reputation is to make others feel unwanted so that they can quit doing what they’re doing, and Pig would steal their spotlight.

Pig is not like other dogs, he’s untidy and his belongings are all over the place. He puts his toys in a pile after he plays with it instead of arranging it from where he got it from. He’d just leave his clothes lying where he took it off instead of putting it in the laundry. After looking for the right outfit/clothes he’s going to wear, he just leaves the unused clothes on the ground. He basically cleans up his room only once a month.

Pig the Pug's Tragic Accident

WALT: To know how to write newspaper reports

Pig the Pug’s Tragic Accident (Is Trevor the Sausage Dog guilty or innocent?)

On the 23rd of March, 2019, Pig the Pug was pronounced injured as he embraced a tragic accident. Trevor, the sausage dog, was involved, but he hasn’t proven guilty or innocent, yet.

Trevor said “That greedy, selfish and self-centered pug wouldn’t share his toys with me. I was bored, I saw him playing with his toys, so I came up to him and asked him if he could share some of his toys with me.” He added. “He said no, and formed a pyramid of toys and stood on top of it. Before I even realize it, he lost his balance and fell off the window.” Could Trevor be lying?

“Trevor pushed me out of jealousness, I was just being defensive to my toys, then he pushed me off the window.” Pig the Pug cried. “NO I DID NOT!” Trevor protested, right after Pig makes him look guilty. “He’s lying! I didn’t push him off the window. It’s really just karma that pushed him, not me!” Trevor said in despite.

Is it really karma? Or does Trevor just don’t want to look guilty?

w7t1 descrptive writing (Delia McCoy)

Delia McCoy - by Angie

It was a misty morning, my family went to town, so that means I’m alone by myself. I get bored easily,
suddenly, something just went into my mind, a story that Aunt Rose told me, it was about the house by
the forest that was abandoned, and it was owned by a malicious old woman, named Delia McCoy who
died ages ago, she was well known for casting spells to her fouls. Some people said she uses voodoo
dolls to get revenge to the people that have most hated her, but I didn’t really believe that.

I decided to go through that forest, and see for myself if the rumours were real. It was a thousand mile
walk! As I enter the house, I could feel that wind touch my skin, as I sniff the dust, it blocked my nose. I
took a step forward, the floor creaked loudly. I finally made my way to this room, which I think was the
room she used to do mean stuff that she wasn’t supposed to do, I saw her old voodoo dolls, a few, short
candles, very sharp needles, an enormous cauldron, transparent potion bottles, and lots more.

I looked through the dirty window and saw the the leaves of the trees dancing, as the wind approaches,
I watched the leaves fall to the ground, it wasn’t a quality view, but something made it worse, I saw a girl
standing outside the house, staring at me. My heart raced like a roller coaster, I was breathless, as I
looked away and caught my breath. I asked myself, “Could this be Delia? What is she doing here? I
thought she was dead?” I asked too many questions, I looked out the window again, she was gone. I
panicked. Before I stepped out of the room, I heard a soft but creepy voice, at that point, I think I knew
who it was, I dashed out of the room like a cheetah.

I rushed downstairs, got out of the house, and immediately closed the door. When I got outside, I was in
a refrigerator, It was so cold that I thought I was about to get frozen alive, I forgot to bring my jacket. I
checked my watch, it was 12:15, nearly afternoon! I had to get back before 1 pm, because that’s when
they get back home. I made my way through the forest, thinking of what I just did. The leaves sounded
like ice breaking as I stepped on it.  For some reason, it felt like someone was following me on the way
back home, but nobody was. “I’m just overthinking.” I said to myself in a low voice.

Finally, I made it home safely, but still reflecting, “What if somebody saw me go to that house and tells
my parents?” I asked myself, I didn’t bother to answer that question though. I changed my clothes and
tried to help myself do things while waiting for my parents, hoping I’ll just forget about going to that house
easily.

Nobody knows what happened to Delia McCoy, and who knows if it was her outside the house, at least
I made it home safe, but I won’t forget what happened today, and only YOU shall know about this.

Christmas Would You Rather?

Christmas Would You Rather...

Be at home on Christmas and get lots of presents?

Or

Go to Disneyland for Christmas but not get any presents?

My Argument: I would rather be at home on Christmas and get lots of presents, because maybe a ticket to Disneyland is one of my presents, and because I would still spend a lot of money for food and souvenirs, and where we have to stay.

Be given $100 for Christmas to buy things to yourself?

Or

Be given $1000 before Christmas to use to buy gifts for other people?

My Argument: I would rather be given $1000 before Christmas, because I could give food to the homeless, because I’m okay if I don’t get anything for Christmas, and two sayings;

-Sharing is caring

-It’s better to give than to receive

What would you rather? And what's your reason?

A Walk In The Park

"We shouldn’t have went here…"

It was the Night of the Friday the 13th, at 1:00AM, when me and my friend decided to go for a little walk in the Abandoned Park just a few metres away from my house. We got all our stuff in our bag; flashlight, phone, snacks, drinks, earphones, etc.

First, we took out our phone and started filming. While we were filming, we saw a terrifying tree, we thought we saw something hanging up the tree, but when we checked what it was, there was nothing. “Can we go home now?!” I said, scared.

We saw a different path, “Let’s go that way!” my friend said without hesitating and without being fearful. We saw a sign which we thought was the name of the park, but we couldn’t read what it was.

Although we were frightened, we still continued following the path. Next, there’s this GIGANTIC, and creepy tree, which also kind of looked like the other one, but this one is more enormous. Since I can tell that my friend’s fear is taking over her braveness, we decided to go home.

2:07 AM; As we were on our way home, we saw this strange-looking, and mysterious thing in the sky that was actually shaped like a U.F.O. We thought it was a plane before, but when we took a little closer look, that’s when we found out it was shaped like a U.F.O. But what could it actually be? Is it a real U.F.O? We might find out, or we might not...

2:54 AM; The moon rised higher, and brighter, as we walk home. After observing the moon dazzling, when we looked away, and looked for the U.F.O, it wasn’t there anymore. There was silence… Until I heard a cry. It sounded like a little girl’s voice. “Did you hear that?” I whispered. “Yeah, it’s creepy.” my friend replied.

3:14 AM; On the way, we walked past a playground, and realized that the swing was swinging by itself. As we continued to roam, we also saw the see-saws going up and down by itself, and that’s when we thought that we needed to get out of the playground because it was also haunted.

3:33 AM; That was the final time that we actually decided to go home and get some rest. So we ran on the way back, following the path that we walked to on the way here. It was dark so we had to take both of our flashlights to light the way, because we might bump into something that we can’t see.

4:29 AM; Finally, we got home. We took a glass of water and drank it, next, I laid on the couch, and my friend went home. “It’s alright, maybe you were just seeing things.” I muttered. BUT! But when I remembered that we were filming the whole time, I decided to take a look at the footage and see if we were actually seeing things or not.

So I took my phone out, and reviewed the footage, and I absolutely knew that I was right, and we weren’t just seeing things…

By: Angie

Explanation about Hokey Pokey

Hokey Pokey Explanation

Hokey Pokey is a sweet that is famous in New Zealand, because It’s an ice cream flavour and it is made
in New Zealand. The ice cream consists of plain vanilla ice cream with small frozen lumps of honeycomb
toffee (Hokey Pokey is the New Zealand term of honeycomb toffee).

Hokey Pokey was made in the 1950s. Why is it called Hokey Pokey? It was because it was named after
the song called “The Hokey Pokey”. Composer Al Tabor claimed that the name came from the London
ice cream vendors of his youth called “Hokey Pokey Men”.

How do you make Hokey Pokey? First get the stuff that you need.. Namely; Sugar, Baking Soda, Golden
Syrup, Baking Pan, Baking Paper, Saucepan, Spatula.

This is how you make hokey pokey:

• Pour ½ cup of sugar to the saucepan.
• Heat up your pan on a stove
• Put ¼ cup of golden syrup.
• Then pour in a little amount of water to make the mixture not so sticky. Let the mixture dissolve.
• When completely melted, set the timer for three minutes to let it cool.
• Next, while mixing the sugar, pour in 2 teaspoons of baking soda. You will see the mixture get puffy
• and thicker when the baking soda is added. When the mixture is melted, let it sit for about an hour
• and a half. Then when cool, you can eat it.

Gas will be formed. The scientific name for the gas that was formed when it was puffing, is called Carbon
Dioxide. Plants produce carbon dioxide.

Kaysha after years

This week in Literacy, we have been working on what would Kaysha (from
"Because of Walter") look like after years

Kaysha after 1 year:

Playing Volleyball with Victoria in the beach

Kaysha after 5 years:

Graduated from High School

Kaysha after 10 years:

Playing games and enjoying her life.

How to make Hokey Pokey

How to Make Hokey Pokey

This week in Literacy, we learnt how to make Hokey Pokey. While Mrs. Jack was making the Hokey Pokey, we had to take notes. This is how you make hokey pokey;

Step 1:
Pour two half a cup of sugar in a pot and heat it in the stove.

Step 2:
Next, Pour some golden syrup into the pot.

Step 3:
Grab a spatula and stir. Set the timer for three minutes.

Step 4:
Pour 2 tsp (teaspoons) of baking soda into the mixture while mixing it. You will see that the mixture will turn thicker and will get puffy.

Step 5:
When the mixture is melted, let it sit for about an hour and a half.

Explanation about Sea Turtles

Last week in Literacy, we have been writing about Explanations. I wrote one about Sea Turtles.

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Title: Sea Turtles

Date: 2 / 08 / 201

Sea Turtles have existed since the Jurassic. They have been here for 150 Million years. They have survived through the challenges of the eons, and the dinosaurs. First, an adult female turtle lays its eggs in where she dug a hole to put the eggs there and protects them from threats. Its eggs feels leathery, and is sized and looks like white, ping-pong balls. Out of 1000 eggs being laid, roughly 20% will never hatch. Adults breed for 2 decades, which is 20 years. A small sea turtle can be about the size of your palm. Unfortunately, 50% who reach the surf will perish. 400 baby turtles reach the water. Along their way to the water, they face danger or threats, such as crabs, seagulls, raccoons, and debris (rubbish). A new host of predators such as; dolphins, sharks, sea birds, fishes, and mostly, killer whales, are also waiting for the sea turtles. Only 20 hatchlings (baby turtles) make it to the adult. After many years, they will grow in size. After approximately 2 decades of age, they will be old enough to breed. Of those that began from eggs in the beach, now less than -10% remain. Some turtles suffer with chemicals in the sea, which caused their survival rate drop to 1% or less, and that made the sea turtles overwhelmed. Now there are only seven remaining species of sea turtles; Loggerhead, Kemp’s Ridley, Olive Ridley, Hawksbill, Flatback, and Leatherback. Sea turtles are now endangered. There used to be millions of sea turtles in the world, but now there’s less than a million. That was a sad journey of growing up as a turtle since they suffer from many threats and they have to risk it just to make it to the adult, or just to survive. 4,600 - which means 90% - of turtles die each year.
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