Explanation about Sea Turtles

Last week in Literacy, we have been writing about Explanations. I wrote one about Sea Turtles.

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Title: Sea Turtles

Date: 2 / 08 / 201

Sea Turtles have existed since the Jurassic. They have been here for 150 Million years. They have survived through the challenges of the eons, and the dinosaurs. First, an adult female turtle lays its eggs in where she dug a hole to put the eggs there and protects them from threats. Its eggs feels leathery, and is sized and looks like white, ping-pong balls. Out of 1000 eggs being laid, roughly 20% will never hatch. Adults breed for 2 decades, which is 20 years. A small sea turtle can be about the size of your palm. Unfortunately, 50% who reach the surf will perish. 400 baby turtles reach the water. Along their way to the water, they face danger or threats, such as crabs, seagulls, raccoons, and debris (rubbish). A new host of predators such as; dolphins, sharks, sea birds, fishes, and mostly, killer whales, are also waiting for the sea turtles. Only 20 hatchlings (baby turtles) make it to the adult. After many years, they will grow in size. After approximately 2 decades of age, they will be old enough to breed. Of those that began from eggs in the beach, now less than -10% remain. Some turtles suffer with chemicals in the sea, which caused their survival rate drop to 1% or less, and that made the sea turtles overwhelmed. Now there are only seven remaining species of sea turtles; Loggerhead, Kemp’s Ridley, Olive Ridley, Hawksbill, Flatback, and Leatherback. Sea turtles are now endangered. There used to be millions of sea turtles in the world, but now there’s less than a million. That was a sad journey of growing up as a turtle since they suffer from many threats and they have to risk it just to make it to the adult, or just to survive. 4,600 - which means 90% - of turtles die each year.
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